shane white

mrs.jones

us history 2


Prohibition story

This is my story of how i ended up being rich for a long time then getting caught and in jail. I was just a young man who liked to drink beer and whisky all the time like every one else. so then the woman where getting mad because husbands where coming home drunk and they would end up beating there wife and making them have sex with them some would even do it to there kids to those where just the ones who couldent handle there liqueor. so the men like that kind of ruined it for the guys who just wanted to go out the bar and have a good time and get drunk. so the government made the prohibition era which is a ban on all alcohol consumption distribution and making. so i was smart and new that people would still want to drink so i started trying to make it myself at my house and it was working for a liltle while i was selling it to my friends and drinking it my self. then the police found out and they came and wrecked everything and i went to jail for 6 months. when i got out i was going to just get a job and go straight and i was working at a factory for about six months but that just wasnt cutting it and i ad to support my family so i decided i put a stil up in the woods and go and make it at night i called it moonshining. so i started making it but i found away to make really potent liquer so i started having my cousin run my moonshine to the city so are buissness got pretty big and we was making all kinds of money and then i started making more and more and got in with the mafia of chicago and the leader al capone so they was buying it from me and i just got loaded i must of been one the richest guys around. then it all went bad i was in where i make the moonshine and a cop drove in and caught me but i ended up getting in to a fight will him and he fell and hit his head and that killed him so i dident no what to do so i went to the mafia and they was hiding me out. so i was hiding there for about 2 months then the cops found out where i was and raided where i was hiding and and arrested everyone and they took us all to jail. so i was sentenced to life in prison so i started planing how to break out. so one day when we was working in the fields i just took off and i was runing and i ended up getting away but i had to go see my family so i did and i was about to leave after seeing them but as i walked out the door there was police everwhere and i pulled my gun but they shot it out off my hand and now im sitting here in jail still thinking about how bad i messed up.

12/8/2013 11:19:36 pm

I think that this is a good story and that it is interesting but it does have many problems. Like its not in paragraph form, and another thing that i could notice is capitalization.

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12/8/2013 11:21:00 pm

I think that its a good story but its not in paragraph form and there is hardly no capitalization.

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12/8/2013 11:23:47 pm

I have to agree with the the fact that your story should be more organized because i could not tell apart some of the information.But keep on doing your wor.

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12/8/2013 11:39:42 pm

your was good, but you need to work on your paragraph.

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